Date: Jun 16, 2022 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really really enjoyed this story. I like any story that takes place well mostly any story I have read some really not good with but I generally like stories that take place after Peter has accepted the Brands and is trying to make his way. I really hated the fact that after four years of show and Peter working his ass off. We didn't get to see priest. Peter Caine. I really like that you brought Paul in that he was so accepting of Peter's role as a priest. Personally, I think that Paul probably would be a little more not disappointed nods. He wouldn't reject Peter out right but I think he would be little bit skeptical of Peter taking the brand and then turning in his badge. I think Paul would understand that Peter would take the Brands to save his father, but I think Blaisdell would well it's like Peter said Blaisdell wouldn't accept his badge. I don't know. I like the way you did that I like the way that you had Captain Sams and Blaisdell talking. She claimed to have had conversations with Paul about Peter situation. However, she didn't seem to act like it or she seemed surprised with Peter's actions which wasn't inconsistency in the show for me. It just didn't make sense if she had spoken to Blazdale about Peter… Surely Blaisdell would have informed her to be aware that Peter tends to operate a little differently. One thing that disturbed me most is during the hostage situation where the Emperor shows up asking for exact change. Karen asked completely flabbergasted by the fact that Peter wants to go in there and try to talk to the robbers. Which really never made sense to me because obviously if she knew anything or had talked to anyone. Certainly it would be somewhere in his file were some information about how he waltzed up to that man fullscope kids and managed to get all of them out. I don't it just seemed a little off to me. So I really like how you stuff to certain things and made them fit into the scenario that you wrote. I will tell you that as much as I truly truly loved this Fanfiction and think that it is probably one of the better ones I've read so far. I definitely wish that I had purchased a few boxes of tissues :-) thank you-Lady Julanna